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Chapter 2

With a small bag containing a pair of binoculars in it strapped on, Rarity set forth into Ponyville in search of her prey. She kept her eyes scanning through the sky, looking for any possible hint of their elusive prey rainbow haired creature.

"I still don't think this is such a good idea." Fluttershy hesitated as she followed Rarity, who looked more like she was openly prowling than searching.

"Nonsense Fluttershy, we have everything that we'll need to properly find out what Rainbow Dash is up to." Rarity said mulling through things in her mind, "All we have to do is catch a simple glimpse of our elusive target and then we can track her." Rarity took another glimpse around the sky, "Fluttershy darling, why don't you fly up and see if you can spot her?"

"Uh…well…okay." Fluttershy agreed quickly spreading her wings and heading into the skies of Ponyville. As it had been for the last week it was cloud free, Rainbow Dash had been working hard every morning to ensure the skies would be cloud free. This allowed the winds more freedom, sending a soft chill down Fluttershy's back as the fresh fall air swept through her fur and between the feathers of her wings.

The added benefit of the clear sky was that it was easier to search from anypony you were looking for in town. As Fluttershy scanned the streets of Ponyville it didn't take long to spot the streaks of a rainbow moving quickly through the town square in an unusual manner.

"She's in the town square moving kind of…sporadically." Fluttershy told Rarity after quickly flying back down.

"Very well! We shall sneak to the edge of the town square and see what she's up to!" Rarity grinned before heading off in full gallop.

"W-wait for me!" Fluttershy quickly said flying as best she could to keep up with Rarity.

It didn't take long to reach the edge of town square. A good thing too, as it seemed that whatever Rainbow Dash had been doing she had about finished when they got there.

"Alright, let's see what we can find out." Rarity quipped quickly while pulling out a pair of rather fancy gold and silver binoculars laced with a few gem stones. She levitated up to her eyes and adjusted them carefully to get a better look at Rainbow Dash, who seemed to be standing outside of city hall.

"What do you see?" Fluttershy asked curiously.

"Well…it seems that Rainbow Dash is talking to the Mayor." Rarity seemed a little confused by this.

"The mayor? I wonder what she wants…" Fluttershy said trying to see what was happening from the distance they were.

"Well it looks like they're just talking…wait!" Rarity said moving forward and adjusting the binoculars again, "It looks like the Mayor is giving Rainbow Dash some kind of a gift."

"A gift?" Fluttershy squeezed her eyes to try and see it. The two figures looked like they were exchanging something, but it was hard to tell. "What's it look like?"

"It's a small bag. I couldn't say…Rainbow is putting it in her shoulder bag…oh, it seems they're done talking." Fluttershy could see Rainbow heading away from the town hall. With a flap of her wings she was streaking through the sky once more, this time heading for the outskirts of town.

"Quickly! We have to keep following her!" Rarity said following after the streak, "Keep an eye on her from the sky Fluttershy." She ordered.

"R-Right." Fluttershy said taking to the sky. She watched that wondrous rainbow streak away as it seemed to fly straight for one of the houses just outside of Ponyville, one that belonged to one of the vegetable growers in Ponyville, Carrot Top. "She's headed for Carrot Top's place." Fluttershy called down to Rarity.

"Let us make haste then!" Rarity said not wanting to miss a moment of what Rainbow was up to.

It only took them about a minute to reach Carrot Top's place. At this part of town there was plenty of nature around the area, and Rarity seemed to have found the perfect bush to hide behind.

"What business could she possibly have at Carrot Top's house?" Rarity mused to herself as she once again took out her binoculars. Fluttershy watched Rainbow Dash as she talked with the orange furred and haired Carrot Top. The two seemed to share a quick laugh before moving to different parts of the garden Carrot Top managed.

"Is Rainbow Dash…gardening?" Fluttershy blinked in confusion, watching her rainbow haired marefriend digging at the dirt with her hooves, pulling out a few carrots that looked ready to be harvested. "It's awfully late in the season to be harvesting carrots too…this must be Carrot Top's last one for the year." Fluttershy thought curiously, "But why is Rainbow helping her with her harvest? She hates gardening…"

"I can't blame her, getting all that icky mud on your hooves must dreadful." Rarity shivered at the thought, before turning back to watch Rainbow Dash carefully, constantly adjusting her binoculars, "Though she seems fully enthused to work on the garden here. Honestly I don't think I've ever seen her with such work ethic."

"She has been working hard lately, it's weird." Fluttershy commented before going back to watch her marefriend toil away hard at the ground in front of Carrot Top's house. Her and Carrot Top were very quickly mulling back and forth, pulling out carrots from the ground and placing them in her cart. There was a surprisingly large crop that they were pulling and it certainly seemed that at the pace Carrot Top was pulling that she'd have been there all day pulling. Rainbow Dash, however, was pulling quickly and efficiently and was pulling carrots at least three times the speed Carrot Top was.

Rarity and Fluttershy continued to watch until every last carrot had been picked, a task that took a surprisingly short time thanks to Dash's efforts. She was covered in dirt almost completely as she walked up to Carrot Top.

"Argh, I still can't hear what they're talking about." Rarity said frustrated, still not wanting to get closer in fear of giving away their position.

Fluttershy tried to listen carefully, but even to her it just sounded like mumbled gibberish. Carrot Top then seemed to gesture that they go inside, but Rainbow Dash shook her head. Carrot Top seemed to frown a little and question Dash's decision pointing to all the dirt on her body, but Dash just nodded her head. Dash then stepped away from Carrot Top before shaking herself free of the dirt she had accumulated. She spoke up now, letting Fluttershy and Rarity hear a bit of the conversation.

"Thanks though, I do appreciate it. I just can't spend too much longer here; I got others to see today." Rainbow nodded.

"Well alright, I understand." Carrot Top smiled, "I'm sure they'll be more than willing to 'help' you too."

"What did she mean by 'help'?" Rarity whispered quietly, "She seemed to have phrased that weirdly…"

"Shh." Fluttershy said quickly, trying to listen in more.

"Well if you need me again, don't be afraid to ask! The sooner the better though." Dash nodded.

"Alright, I'll keep that in mind." Carrot Top grinned happily.

"Seeya later Carrot Top." Dash said waving to her before heading into the sky once more, Carrot Top waving back.

"Drat, come on Fluttershy, we can't lose her." Rarity said quickly running out from behind the bush, Fluttershy quickly doing her best to follow after Rarity in such a rush.

"…Huh? Was that Fluttershy and Rarity?" Carrot Top blinked watching the two ponies heading into town after Rainbow Dash.

Rainbow landed quickly before the entrance to Sugar Cube Corner. She looked around the streets quickly, seeing ponies around, but seemed to be looking out for specific ones. Satisfied with her scan she briskly walked into the delectable bakery.

"She clearly wants to make sure what she's doing is kept secret from somepony. Most likely you." Rarity pondered the actions from behind the house corner they were currently stationed.

"Other than her work ethic…I didn't really see anything wrong with her helping Carrot Top with her garden…I'm sure she's just buying something from Sugar Cube Corner." Fluttershy mumbled softly, starting to think even more now that they were just invading Rainbow's privacy.

"Nonsense Fluttershy, that alone is enough to warrant more research. She acted out of character with Carrot Top, meaning she's up to something." Rarity pondered more, "What reason could she have for doing something she dislikes?" Rarity went quiet for a moment as her mind mulled it over.

Fluttershy caught the undertones of Rarity's words. The only time Dash did things she disliked is when it made somepony else happy. After all, in the half a year they'd been dating Dash had done so many wonderful things for her that Dash didn't like to do that much. Be it simply sitting around and watching nature, or quietly cuddling into the night…she only did that for somepony that she loved…

"Come on; let's see if we can sneak a peek into Sugar Cube Corner." Rarity said quickly prancing over to the sugar coated building. Fluttershy followed quickly as the two of them carefully peeked into the bakery.

The window revealed the kitchen within filled with a blue Pegasus and a pink earth pony busy mixing ingredients. They seemed to be working quickly while conversing the whole time. Rarity tried pressing her ear against the window to listen in, but the sound was simply too distorted by the clashing of spoons mixing, hooves walking behind them and conversations all over.

"Well…it just looks like Rainbow is helping out at Sugar Cube Corner…" Fluttershy mumbled quietly to Rarity.

"Yes…but that doesn't answer the question of why she would avoid you for this." Rarity squinted her eyes watching the two ponies in question. It seemed like simple baking enough, until a mishap with a bowl sent it flying and landed on Rainbow's head. Rainbow quickly shook her mane and seemed to get a grin, before throwing her bowl full of flour back at Pinkie.

In perhaps one of the quickest manners possible, the situation inside went from a simple 'help bake' to a full on food fight. The kitchen was quickly becoming a mess as the two goofed around, just playing around inside of the kitchen.

"Oh look at that ruffian! She's making an absolute mess! And all that flour and sugar in her mane…oh its simply dreadful!" Rarity shivered watching the display. "What on earth do they think they're doing?" She asked turning to look at Fluttershy.

Fluttershy had placed a hoof against the window as she watched the two mares playing inside of the bakery. Rarity stopped speaking as she saw the look in Fluttershy's eyes. It seemed sadness was starting to wash over her, a sense of loneliness over the fact that Rainbow Dash didn't want her around while she was off having fun.

'Am I…holding her back from having fun?' The thought ran through Fluttershy's head as she watched them play around. Rainbow wasn't this rough around her; it was as if Rainbow Dash always made sure to take care of her by being delicate and gentle. But here she was free to be as rough as she wanted, Pinkie Pie could handle it and it looked like she was having so much fun…

"Fluttershy dear, I don't know if this means anything just yet." Rarity said putting a hoof against her shoulder for comfort, "I'm sure there's a reason for all of this. Let's just keep observing, alright?" Rarity did her best to smile, realizing how things were starting to look.

"A-Alright…" Fluttershy said quietly, turning back to watch the two playing inside.

The play fight lasted for a few minutes before the two collapsed together on the floor of kitchen laughing over their escapades. Once they'd had a moment to calm down, Rainbow looked around the room and spoke to Pinkie quickly. Pinkie nodded and the two of them briskly went to work cleaning up the mess they had made of the kitchen. The two working together didn't take long and were soon pulling freshly baked goods out of the oven to decorate.

Rarity and Fluttershy watched for about an hour in total, getting strange looks from passing ponies but were left alone to their spying. Rainbow had finally finished her business in Sugar Cube Corner and headed for the front door.

"Move move!" Rarity said quickly to Fluttershy, the two of them quickly moving around the corner of the building and out of sight.

"Thanks again Pinkie Pie." Rainbow said as the front door opened and she stepped out.

"I should be the one thanking YOU Dashie! I got so much work done, it was worth it! You should really come by again sometime to make MORE treats!" Pinkie said cheerfully.

"I probably will. But I still have some things I gotta do first. I'll catch ya later alright?" Rainbow grinned to her friend.

"Okie Dokie! Bye Dashie!" Pinkie waved as Rainbow took off into the sky once more, before Pinkie disappeared back into Sugar Cube Corner.

"Okay, so her little adventure here seems to have come to an end." Rarity said peeking her head around the corner, "We should follow her before we lose sight of her."

"Right." Fluttershy nodded.

"Spy mission accepted." Pinkie said saluting.

"EEP!" Fluttershy said jumping back from the sudden appearing pony.

"Pinkie Pie!? What're you doing here?" Rarity asked turning to look baffled at their friend.

"Oh don't be silly, you've been watching us for a while now." Pinkie giggled, "Why didn't you come inside and play? It was a lot of fun!"

"Pinkie, we're following Rainbow Dash. We're trying to find out why she's been avoiding Fluttershy." Rarity explained quickly.

"Huh? Rainbow Dash has been avoiding Fluttershy?" Pinkie sounded shocked as she tapped her chin in thought. "Oh! I know why!" Pinkie grinned happily.

"R-Really?" Fluttershy blinked confused.

"You do?" Rarity asked shocked, "Then why don't you tell us already?"

"Oh well you see it's because…" Pinkie had been bouncing in place before stopping herself as if she realized something, "Oh…uh…sorry, I know but I can't tell you. I promised Dash I wouldn't."

"…O-Oh…w-well it's okay then Pinkie…" Fluttershy mumbled rubbing her hoof against her leg.

"Ugh." Rarity put a hoof to her face, "Pinkie Pie, you do know that sometimes it's just better to tell the truth than to let your friends be hurt, right?"

"Sorry Rarity, no can do. I Pinkie Pie swore, so I can't go back on it or else I'll get a cupcake in my eye." Pinkie motioned her hoof into her eye, "Though I already had my face covered in cupcakes for the day. They were just tasty though, not because I broke my promise. Hey, do you guys want some cupcakes? We just baked some fresh ones and they're really delicious!" Pinkie licked her lips happily.

"Sorry darling, maybe next time. If you're not telling us what she's up to we have to keep following her." Rarity nodded, not wanting to let this go till she got some answers.

"W-Well…we've lost track of her now…we don't know where she went…" Fluttershy said in dissapointment, looking around.

"Oh, that's easy. She went over to Lyra and Bonbon's house." Pinkie smiled.

"Wait, I thought you weren't allowed to tell us?" Rarity raised an eyebrow curiously.

"Oh silly, I didn't tell you what she's up to, just where she went." Pinkie smiled happily, "Well good luck with your spy mission! I'd join you but I don't think Dash would like that very much. So I'll just keep baking some treats in Sugar Cube Corner." Pinkie then bounced off merrily towards the store.

"Hmmm…" Rarity thought about Pinkie's actions carefully.

"What's the matter Rarity?" Fluttershy asked confused.

"I don't know…that just seemed…how do I put this…odd? I'm not sure what's going on at all now. Let's go find Rainbow Dash and see what she's up to. I'm CERTAIN we can get more answers before the day is done." Rarity said, quickly walking in the direction of Lyra and Bonbon's house.

Fluttershy followed quickly, not sure what to say either, only able to take the events that had transpired for what they appeared to be.

Rarity and Fluttershy stood outside of Lyra and Bonbon's house for what seemed like an eternity. At first they had thought perhaps Pinkie had lied to them to throw them off of Rainbow's trail, but they had spotted the Pegasus passing by a window and knew she was in the house. Though it felt like a lot of time had passed, only about thirty minutes had actually passed since they had started watching.

At that time the door clicked open and the two spying mares hid themselves as best as possible, viewing what would happen next.

"Huuuuuu…" Rainbow let out a deep breath as she exited the house; it was obviously noticeable that she had been perspiring, a lot. "Thanks you two, I really needed that." Rainbow laughed softly, a little out of breath as she adjusted her shoulder bag and stretched.

"Oh no, no need to thank us, we couldn't have done this without you." Bonbon smiled to the Pegasus.

"Yea, you were a BIG help! That would've been impossible if it had just been between the two of us." Lyra grinned happily.

"Well no problem guys, just give me a shout if you need me again! I promise I'll give you the same excellent Rainbow Dash service." Rainbow patted her chest happily.

"We'll do just thank. See you later." Bonbon waved.

"Thanks for everything!" Lyra waved as well. Rainbow spread her wings and carefully took off into the sky this time, breathing a little heavier than she had been before, as if she had just been tired out.

Rarity and Fluttershy stared quietly, taking what just happened.

"I'm…I'm sure that WASN'T what it just seemed like." Rarity laughed awkwardly, looking around shiftily.

"Y-Yea…Rainbow…Rainbow Dash isn't that kind of mare…" Fluttershy swallowed carefully, trying to control her emotions. She had to keep telling herself she trusted Rainbow Dash, that she wouldn't do anything to hurt her on purpose. She loved her after all, Rainbow wouldn't do bad things behind her back…right?

"C-Come on Fluttershy, I'm sure if we see where she's going now it'll clear this whole fiasco up." Rarity tried to laugh in comfort, placing a hoof on Fluttershy's shoulders. Fluttershy nodded slowly to her friend and the two quickly followed after their rainbow colored target.

Rainbow Dash hadn't gone too far from Lyra and Bonbon's house. Just about two streets away and was currently talking with a cream coated pony with burgundy hair they knew named Rose. As Fluttershy and Rarity hid behind a conveniently placed bush in town watching them, it seemed that the two were arguing over a piece of paper in Rainbow's hands.

"What do you think they're arguing about?" Fluttershy asked, confused watching Rainbow Dash push her hoof against the paper she was holding as she seemed to argue with Roseluck.

"I'm not sure…" Rarity rubbed her chin in thought, "She does seem to be very passionate about her case though."

It was true. Rose was walking back and forth before Rainbow Dash, flicking her head around, waving her hoof in the air, twirling her mane as she spoke. Rose was very animated for whatever she was talking to Rainbow Dash about. Once again, they couldn't get too close, if they got within speaking distance there was a strong possibility of getting caught spying.

"Hmmm…I don't suppose this could be any kind of property dispute or…wait!" Rarity said stopping herself watching the scene suddenly change. Rose drew closer to Rainbow Dash as the conversation continued. Rainbow didn't really seem to notice, just reading away at the paper before her.

Suddenly Rose placed a hoof against Rainbow's shoulder, making Rainbow look up in surprise. In that instance, Rose pressed her lips against Rainbow's.

Fluttershy suddenly felt as if the world had shattered around her. She hadn't wanted to believe it, but she was seeing it with her own eyes now. Rainbow Dash wasn't hanging out with her anymore because she wanted the company of other ponies. Not just one, but many other ponies. Her face grew hot as she could feel the tears instantly begin to burn at the edges of her eyes.

"Fluttershy, I-" Rarity began to say but she didn't want to stick around anymore. She turned and ran, flapping her wings as she took off into the sky, feeling the cold splash of her tears streaming down her face.

"RAINBOW DASH!" Fluttershy heard the loud yell of her dear friend, but she didn't stop. She didn't want to be around anypony right now. It felt like a gaping hole had opened in her chest and it hurt to breath. She flew straight for her house, as fast as she could fly.

Nothing felt real anymore as she slammed her front door closed and isolated herself from the world.
Again, no proofreader, but my goal was to get this done BEFORE I headed to work and mission accomplished.

Oh no, it seems the worst possible situation has arrived~

Or has it?

I guess we'll find out!

-Rushes out to work-
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LunaRainbowshy Featured By Owner May 24, 2015
Nooo fluttershy 
she is only practice with rose lunk! !!!
hearnishere123 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Until the kiss I was firm on my though Rainbow has been very busy earning money to propose to Fluttershy and pay for a wedding since they would never get any money help from their folks. I mean she wants to get engaged and what not to Fluttershy before she has to leave for a year. She wants to make sure Fluttershy doesn't get sad while she is gone, thinking "Will Dash come back?" or not. Rarity just can't see this because her perfect colt would be rich enough to not have to do extra work. I'm sure Rose and Dash were arguing was because wanted a kiss before Dash would get paid, but Dash didn't want to feel like she was cheating but she needed the money. By the way, I thought she was doing this to engage since Carrottop's house.
KaitlynChipmunk0321 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is the only mistake I found :P "We'll do just thank. See you later." Bonbon waved.
*thank = that*
Now to comment on the story...*deep inhale*

WHOA!!! What the-? HUH?! I'm seriously distraught but I'm hoping this isn't what we think it is :C
btw I can't watch mlp:fim the same way since reading your stuff! >8C.....KD Iiiiii LIKE it!
BlackSheepRising Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What the hell...
BlizzardIceFox Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WHY...??!!? :iconwhyyyyplz:
Landon193 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
Jake, you're a monster(for now)... That kiss made my heart explode, twice, but in the same shock fluttershy must have felt as hers exploded exponentially untillmitnwas untraceable... This better be as good as the others
TanithLipsky Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011
madman12000 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
Poor Flutters, looking forward to what happens next.
Jiro-Dyne Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
Watch out Rainbow! Fluttershy might turn into Flutter-rage and kick your flank!
PinkstarMLP Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Student General Artist
there is no way dash is cheating on fluttershy and i got proof

in the story rainbow was surprised when roseluck kissed her that means she did not want anything except the job

and my spelling still sucks but thee is rightclick correct:P
lol if you rightclick fluttershy it says that you can correct her into "aflutter" wtf?


ps justin beiber sucks <========3 this
daguy1234 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
Of all the things that could happen this is the WORST. POSSIBLE. THING!
theath2k Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Student General Artist
so, just read all of the silent ponyville and flutterdash stories you wrote, they're all amazing... 2 hooves up! except this last one because WANT CHAPTER 3! lol keep up the good writing! and if they break up,I'm boarding the "jake is a monster" train, just fyi:D (though i did buy my ticket when lance tried to drown fluttershy... grrr...)
EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011
I maybe a couple fics late to this band wagon but: JAKE YOU FUCKING MONSTER!!
Somehow Im cool with Fluttershy getting beat up, cry, get her wing broken, cry some more, and have a shitty foalhood but when she crys because she assumes shes getting cheated on I join the "Jake is a monster" bandwagon.
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011
You sure took a while to join that bandwagon XD
AjaxIsIn Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011
Why is there not a group about this already..?
EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011
btw you should link your DA to the EQD page. Just a suggestion, you monster.
Xeno-the-Hedgehog Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm under the distinct impression that Dash is raising bits to buy an anniversary gift and/or wedding ring.
CodyMau Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Ah, I see her chef's hat has been removed. lol

Naturally Rainbow is not going to betray her loved one. While a hot lesbian threesome would probably be cool (assuming it was girls and not ponies) she probably just moved a bed or something. My guess is she's saving up money to help support a child while she's on the road within the deadline she has. As for that second mare... I dunno. Maybe she found Rainbow's add and did want some hot filly fooling, to which the biggest tomboy in the town advised she's not a prostitute.

This one actually hit pretty close to home... I understand you Fluttershy.
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
Yeah, Roseluck is definitely just being a whore. Seriously, AUGH!

*goes to brood over stuff I can't talk about yet*
theath2k Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Student General Artist
Your brooding over stuff you can't talk about makes me brood over possible outcomes of this story that you are brooding over. -_-;;
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Your brooding over my brooding over stuff I can't talk about yet is making me brood over the fact that I am powerless to do much of anything to stop you from brooding over my brooding which you shouldn't brood too much about.

Also, broodception.
theath2k Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Student General Artist
You get +1 internets for simultaneously not aiding in my brooding, and making my head hurt.

Also... broodhoof perhaps?
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
ArcAngelV1 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
Ah yes, one of the many drawbacks of jumping to conclusions without the whole story. Good luck digging yourself out of this one Dash... then again, Fluttershy is essentially Equestria's pushover. 20% chance of Dash receiving the stare when she goes to try and explain this one. Excellent story thus far.
InsomniacOvrLrd Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Oh, and Jake, this does need a bit of cleaning up. :/
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Most of this chapter was absolutely D'aawww for me, until I got the desire to beat the crap out of Roseluck. HOW DARE SHE? D:<
Asgard314 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
I haven't read the 3rd part yet (So I may be wrong) but it seems like they were acting. Roseluck being animated seems to be her playing a character, and Rainbow Dash reading from a paper was to read off the lines of the other characters. It's possible Roseluck's part called for a kiss there, and Rainbow Dash wasn't readyfor it, or she was using that oppertunity despite RD being in a relationship. In that case, (Pull's out an Einlander [Demoman weapon]) KILL THE ROSELUCK!!!!!!
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
Asgard314 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
*Begins to heal Ace, gets an uber*
Ready? *Trollface*
PatRoison Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Things are about to get a whole lot worse. I don't think Rainbow's cheating on Fluttershy since Rose Luck kissed her. I can only imagine what the confrontation with Rarity will be like.
NotAGoodUsername360 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Rule of Drama #28: If someone (eg. a past lover) unexpectedly kisses you without warning, and you're attempting to keep a secret of any kind, you current lover WILL be watching from directly behind you or hidden just out of sight, regardless of precautions taken against this. No exceptions


Oh, Dash... of all ponies, why'd it have to be YOU to get stuck with the Idiot Ball today?

And shame on Pinkie for letting this happen- her 4th wall awareness makes her PLENTY genre-savvy enough to realize where that was going, and she couldn'tve cared less about the inevitable jeopardization of their relationship...

Time for punishment...

*sneaks into canon storyline's Foalsome prison*

*breaks The Colt out of the prison, giving him a map with directions to Pinkie Pie's house*

It's poetically just because I don't care about what happens to her in the same way she didn't care what would happen to Dash and Fluttershy! ^_^
SightSear Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
Release the Colt and sic him on Pinkie? That's evil! NO, That is BEYOND EVIL! That.. that...

You make me think of Lance Strongshy.

Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
Oh, that's not anything new for him XD
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Rainbow Dash is ASEXUAL. She wouldn't HAVE any past lovers, or else I would know.

Send someone after Roseluck, not Pinkie.
NotAGoodUsername360 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Evidently not... or at least, according to Roseluck...

And Pinkie Sense should have warned her about that anyways!

Isn't there a tic for "Your silence will cause nothing but misery and pain"? :/
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Dash doesn't have ANY past romantic relationships. My word is as good as Jake's there. Roseluck must have always had a crush on Dash since she moved to Ponyville and for whatever absolutely retarded is deciding to act on it JUST NOW.
:iconffuuuplz: Roseluck!

And I'm pretty sure there's not a tic for that. :/
NotAGoodUsername360 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
There's a tic for EVERYTHING.

Besides, she's the fourth wall breaker! She should be GENRE-SAVVY! THE SETUP IS QUITE OBVIOUS!

She knows... I just KNOW she knows...

Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
There's only a tic for what the plot calls for there to be a tic for. :/

Besides, I'm fairly sure there's no way Pinkie knew.
ArcAngelV1 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
Actually, Pinkie probably did know, but she must then also know that everything will turn out just fine. Or she wants them to break up so she can have Dash all to herself. Pinkie, you wretched evil genius.
Ace2401 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
No, Pinkie probably didn't know that Roseluckwould try that, or else I'm sure Pinkie would have given Rose a talking to before it became a problem. Considering the circumstances (which you don't know the extent of yet :3), that's the most likely scenario.
lazynerd Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
W-wait.....was it my comment on the prolog that changed the picture?........... Oh dear god.......the power that I possess............

Anyway, as :iconbrony17: said "This better have a good explanation," or there's about to be one less rainbow-maned pegasus in Equestria...... D:<
PinkstarMLP Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Student General Artist
i found a few mistakes one is when rarity shivers from the food fight she says "what on earth" ponify it to what in equestria
second at the end when rainbow is with rose you said she has hands

ps i dont think she is cheating on fluttershy she just doing things to get her mind off her but roseluck pushed her luck and there is gana be a big problem in ch3

lastly love all your stories exept disharmony one didnt think it was that good but yeah nice job

pss would you write alternative ending for sillent ponyville2 where fluttershy dad gets killed by rainbow just want to see him dead after what he did
Brony17 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
He sits at his desk regarding his computer, hooves placed together in front of his face, brow furrowed in severe disapproval. Here he was, spending some quality time with one tormentor, when suddenly somepony else goes and breaks her heart like the patriarch had broken her body.

There was a familiar hiss of steam behind him, accompanied by a low, unnatural, questioning growl.

He holds up a hoof, not looking back, "No. We wait this one out for now. Resume your work with the amber surgeon."

There comes a metallic groan of disappointment in answer followed by retreating hoof steps.

"This better have a good explanation."
WooberJig Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Oh my. That doesn't sound too good. I'm kind of with the theory of Rainbow Dash working towards a goal related to Fluttershy and she was planning for it to be a pleasant surprise.
nailbudday Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
damn. you're booking it man.
hey, any plans on another livestream soon? after this is done of course.
speedyson Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Ok, I know this isn't what it looks like... maybe he's planning a romantic thing as a final date for Fluttershy? Then why Rose? This is gonna drive me nuts!
IcyPheonix Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Student General Artist
Rainbow Dash isn't a he. Rainbo Dasj is a she.
speedyson Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oops, my bad. Gotta stop getting her gender messed up in my head.
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