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Chapter 4


It was decided that the wedding would be held the day after first snow fall, meaning the wedding would be held in two weeks' time. It didn't take long for the news of the wedding to be spread throughout Ponyville. Rarity had made a fuss about the suddenness of the date, but Rainbow explained that after her Wonderbolts audition she wanted to spend every possible moment with Fluttershy before she went off to her training. This seemed to pacify Rarity and Rainbow left for her audition the next morning.

For the small town of Ponyville weddings weren't that common despite the amount of relationships the town seemed to harbor. It seemed most ponies enjoyed the simple dating scene over making that final step of commitment, but whenever a couple did make that decision it was news the whole town heard about. You could be certain everypony who could show up was going to.

The moment Pinkie knew the wedding was confirmed she'd set in motion to prepare for it. She'd been going all around town gathering materials and decorations they would need. She also said she was going to take care of the music, saying she'd already sent a letter to her sister Octavia to provide some proper classical music. The dance music would have to be saved for the reception.

Applejack had taken it into her hooves to provide the buffet and refreshments for the wedding. Pinkie Pie had been insistent on doing that as well, but Applejack had convinced her that they all wanted a part in the wedding of their closest friends and she was already taking care of most of the partying. Pinkie was saddened by this, but Applejack promised that she could help bake the big wedding cake, which cheered Pinkie right up.

Twilight took charge of organizing the event, making sure they would have everything they would need. Since this was the first wedding she ever had attended, let alone was in charge of organization for, she wanted to make sure everything would go absolutely perfectly. She even took a short break from her studies to read up on weddings and how they were meant to play out. With her at the helm, there was no doubt this would be a picture-perfect wedding… at least she desperately hoped.

This left Rarity with the ever so essential task of fitting Fluttershy with the best possible wedding dress she could manage.

"Hmmmm…" Rarity tapped her hoof to her chin in thought as she carefully measured and re-measured as much of Fluttershy's body as she could possibly wrap her measuring tape around. "No no no, this simply won't do." Rarity said levitating the white fabric from Fluttershy's back, "Your dress must make you look simply divine, after all this is going to be THE most important day of your LIFE! I will not have you looking like a fashion faux pas!"

"I trust you Rarity, I know you'll have me looking my-mph!" Fluttershy squeaked softly as the measuring tape tightened around a tender spot, "-looking my best." She smiled softly.

"Oh absolutely darling. I haven't had the opportunity to design a true wedding dress just yet, so this is going to take most of my…no, ALL of my cunning! Everything has to be just right! Not a seam or stitch out of place! Everything about this dress must shine! You will be a radiant angel once I'm done with you!" Rarity bemused with herself as she sorted through her various assortment of white fabrics. Each one had a different, intricate pattern or was made out of various fine materials. Each one seemed to have slightly different woven patterns, as Rarity had gone all out with her fabric choices this time around.

"Well, I'm sure it'll be lovely." Fluttershy smiled as she looked into the mirror she stood before. Rarity had already started on the undermost layer of the dress, giving each of her legs special stockings. They each had a beautifully ornate flower decoration embroidered into the silk. They felt wonderful on her legs; Rarity truly knew the right materials to use.

"Ah-hah, these will be perfect!" Rarity almost purred with a devious tone causing Fluttershy to raise an eyebrow curiously. She suddenly felt her flank being surrounded by magic as it was rather quickly lifted into the air. A blush crawled onto her face as she felt something both frilly and silky soft slip up her haunches.

"O-Oh my…" Fluttershy blushed harder as she saw the fabric Rarity had placed onto her in the mirror. They were some rather risqué undergarments. "I-Is that really necessary Rarity?"

"Oh but of course." Rarity said giving her a devilish eye once more that seemed to sparkle, "After all the undergarments aren't for the company of the crowd to see, they're for… after the wedding." Rarity chuckled and turned to grab more material. "And you want to look your best for everything." Fluttershy felt her whole face turn red at Rarity's word, causing her to gently tap her hoof against the ground.

"Now do hold still dear, I need to figure out the perfect design for your dress." Rarity amused herself further, gently laying some lengthy patterned silk onto her back that flowed well past her legs, lying against the floor. Rarity quickly went to work piling different patterns and styles of cloth onto her back, lining up several pieces in preparation of sewing them together. She kept glancing at several different sketches of possible dress ideas as she worked, making absolutely sure they would look fabulous on Fluttershy.

"Okay Fluttershy, I'm going to do some sewing with the cloth still on you. I'd normally use a dummy for this, but I want to make sure everything is absolutely perfect so I can minimize how much I have to redo. Wedding dresses use absolutely precious materials and I can't afford to waste too much. So I'm going to be as delicate as I can and we might be here for a while, is that alright?" Rarity asked levitating up her needle and thread.

"I understand. Do as you need to." Fluttershy smiled as Rarity pushed her glasses closer to her face and prepared to thread the needle with thread and begin her delicate work.

"NO AH WANNA BE THE BRACELET BEARER!"

"You can't be the bracelet bearer! I have to be the bracelet bearer!"

"Can't you both be the bracelet bearer?"

"NO!"

Rarity instantly halted her advances with the needle as three familiar young fillies burst into the room, apparently arguing over their roles in the wedding.

"Listen, Rainbow Dash is MY idol here! I HAVE to be the bracelet bearer!" Scootaloo's argument was flawless.

"So!? The bracelet bearer is THE MOST important job in the wedding! And ah want to have it!" Applebloom's retort was just as flawless.

"You guys can just share the role! That way you both get to do it!" Sweetie Bell rolled her eyes with the amazing nugget of wisdom she provided.

"NO!" Applebloom and Scootaloo fired back with their amazingly well thought out retorts.

"Girls, girls, girls, whatever is the matter here?" Rarity asked gently placing down her materials before walking over to the bickering crusaders.

"Applebloom's trying to take my job as the bracelet bearer!" Scootaloo pointed an accusatory hoof at the offender.

"Take it!? Ah am not! The job rightfully belongs to me! Ah'm the only one here who can pull off the bracelet bearer's job correctly!" Applebloom stuck her nose up in the air defiantly.

"Are not!" Scootaloo yelled pressing her nose comically against Applebloom's.

"Ah'm too!" Applebloom pressed back.

"Are not!"

"Ah'm too!"

"Are not!"

"Ah'm too!"

"Okay, okay, break it up girls." Rarity said pushing them apart, "There's plenty of roles in the wedding for each of you. And they're ALL important. A wedding is about the love being shared between the two, about the elegance and grace of the entire event." Rarity poised her body in emphasis, "Everyone who is part of the ceremony plays a key role. Everything must go perfectly and that includes your roles."

"Even the flower girl?" Sweetie Bell asked looking quite happy at this.

"But of course Sweetie Bell, and you'll make a fantastic flower girl." Rarity smiled.

"Well…okay, but who gets to be the bracelet bearer then?" Scootaloo asked, looking at Rarity curiously.

"Oh, that's not up for me to decide. Fluttershy darling, who do you think the bracelet bearer should be?" Rarity asked turning to her friend who still stood before the mirror, doing her best to not move with the materials still draped around her.

"Oh…uh well…" Fluttershy turned her head to look at the two little fillies that were looking up at her with pleading eyes, "Well…" Fluttershy looked back at the long piece of cloth that was lying against the floor behind her, before thinking about the jobs she could give each of them during the wedding. A light bulb appeared in her head.

"Oh, I know. Scootaloo, since you are Rainbow's number one fan and it's mainly her ring, I'm going to let you be the ring bearer." Fluttershy smiled.

"Yes!" Scootaloo pumped her hoof into the air.

"Awwww…" Applebloom said dejectedly.

"And Applebloom, I need you to do a job just as important for me." Fluttershy smiled, perking the young fillies curiosity, "As you can see, my dress is going to be really long once its finished. So I'm going to need you to hold my dress to keep it from dragging as I walk down the aisle. How does that sound?"

"Ah'd love to!" Applebloom perked up happily, "That sounds super important!"

"Oh and it is. I don't want to trip and fall on my dress during the wedding after all." She gave a kind smile.

"Alright! We all have our jobs for the wedding!" Applebloom said excitedly turning to the others.

"We've got to make sure we can perform them flawlessly!" Scootaloo said excitedly.

"This is going to be the best wedding ever!" Sweetie Bell said excitedly.

"CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS PERFECT WEDDING MAKERS! YAY!" The three fillies cried out loudly together before quickly rushing out of the room.

"My, my, my, you do have a way with foals don't you." Rarity chuckled softly before closing the door behind them.

"I didn't used to think I did…but I suppose I just have a way with small creatures." Fluttershy chuckled softly, happy for the compliment. "I really can't wait to be a mom myself…it's going to be so wonderful." Fluttershy looked up at the ceiling in thought, her eyes sparkling with joy at the thought.

" I know you will make a wonderful mother." Rarity smiled walking over to her friend once again, her magic stirring as she picked up the materials to continue her dress making work, "Have you thought about what you'll name your foal?"

"Oh…well for a boy I was originally thinking of naming him Lance. But Rainbow Dash would have a fit." Fluttershy chuckled to herself.

"Lance…your father's name right?" Rarity looked at her curiously.

"Yes. I was thinking it might be nice to name my child after someone so important in my life, but I think Dash wants a more... original name." It was a bit of a white lie. Although her friends knew who her father was now, Dash was still the only one who knew about her past with him. Fluttershy wanted her other friends to like her father if possible, after all she still loved him despite everything and wanted him to be a part of her life. "So my other choice for a boy was Blitz. I think it's a name Rainbow would like."

"Yes, it does fit her ruffian nature." Rarity chuckled as she carefully levitated a new piece of cloth over as her needle finished sewing up a small section. "What would you name a girl?"

"Serenity." Fluttershy smiled happily.

"That's a beautiful name." Rarity smiled as well.

The room was quiet for a moment as Rarity began to sew away, humming quietly as she worked. Fluttershy watched the mirror carefully as the dress came together on her back. Rarity really was doing what she could to make her look spectacular.

"So…speaking of parents…" Rarity suddenly spoke up as if something came across her mind, Fluttershy's ears perking up, "Are Rainbow Dash's parents going to be attending the wedding? I assume they are, but I haven't heard a word about them for as long as we've been friends." Rarity thought about it as she carefully sewed a particularly difficult seam.

"…Well…actually I don't know either. Even though I was around Rainbow Dash a lot in my foalhood I never went over to her house or saw her parents…and as far as I know, she left them behind like everything else when she left Cloudsdale. And she hasn't said a word about if they are or aren't." Fluttershy explained to Rarity what she knew.

"…You don't think that's a little odd?" Rarity asked, turning to look Fluttershy in the eye, "My parents would kill me if I didn't invite them to my wedding, and aren't yours coming?"

"Well…I sent the invitation to my Dad along with the rest, but I don't know if he'll be coming, he's usually so busy." Fluttershy smiled softly, looking at the mirror.

"What about your mother?" Rarity asked curiously.

"O-Oh…I guess I didn't tell you. I'm sorry." Fluttershy smiled softly, "My mother will be there, I'm sure, but you won't be able to see her." She turned her head to look up at the ceiling, "I'm sure she has a special seat where she'll be watching me, and I'm sure she's proud of my decisions in life." She closed her eyes in remembrance.

"O-Oh…Oh Fluttershy…I'm sorry, I didn't mean to-"

"It's okay Rarity." Fluttershy turned to look at her smiling, "You didn't know and I've accepted what's happened in my past. There's no reason to feel sorry."

Rarity put her tools down carefully before giving her friend a hug. Fluttershy blinked curiously, before returning it.

"I know I was doing this already, but now I have even less of a choice." Rarity said letting go, seeming more determined. "I have to ensure that this truly will be a perfect wedding for you!"

"…Thank you Rarity. I know you'll do wonderfully." Fluttershy smiled happily, turning to look at herself in the mirror once more. She could see an adult, yellow mare with pink hair gently laying against her neck. A mare that had a lot happen in her past, from a tormented foalhood, to living on her own after school, to finding so many friends she could enjoy time with, and finding real love. And there she stood, heading into one of the happiest days of her life, alongside the one pony who made her happier than any other pony in the world.

She had come a long way since she was a foal, and one day soon she would have a foal of her own. She could feel her heart swelling as she looked at herself.

'I hope I've made you proud mother. I've lived my life doing my best to be happy and make others happy. And I want to keep making you proud.' Fluttershy closed her eyes, listening to the happy humming of Rarity as she worked.
This chapter was finished 3 minutes before I headed out to work lol.

Thank to :iconace2401: for proof reading it. So now you can give it a more proper read without having to wrap your mind around some of my writing mistakes (and if you see anything left over please feel free to point them out ^^)

Now that that's done, this is the second to last chapter. There's one more full chapter, then a short epilogue.

I hope you're all ready with your d'aww buckets and napkins! Cause next chapter is the wedding and boy is it a doozy :3
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hearnishere123 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
I demand fan art of some of this.... Is't there someone who would make it?
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TheKoboldNecromancer Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
I love CMC arguing over being the bracelet bearer, they can be very funny! ;) And wow, more Rarity? You spoil her fans!
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luckyboy2308 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
THIS
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AWESOME!!!!!
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Frog804 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
AHH love it! =D
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Landon193 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
Clap
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Casandraelf Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i noticed a bit of a screw up: you initially said that there would be a bracelet bearer, but then you put 'ring bearer' down a couple of times.
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TanithLipsky Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011
:D
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madman12000 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
Manly tears were shed
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
Hm should they really be planning a name for a boy? If their able to bear children dispite the problem of them being both female, then a male is a direct impossibilty if my limited knowledge of biology is correct. Females can't give a Y-chromosome so no male can be made. Hell if lesbianism is as common as this fandom seems to think it is and they devoloped ways to allow such pairings to give birth it could explain why their not a lot of males. As the lesbianism becomes the preferred method of breeding, males become rarer and unnecessary. Hell one could go to an extreme and say in a couple dozen generation of ponies males would be virtually nonexistent beyond a rare sterile mutation and the results of magical mishaps.

Though maybe you mean if they adopt a boy or something, then again wouldn't had already been given some form of name or can the parents adoupting the child just change it? Though I do admit my knowledge of the practices of orphanages are lacking.
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the-provalone Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
Lets not forget the panacea of the MLP universe, Magic. If magic can move the heavens, preform selective personality removals, and instantly age a dragon hatching to full adulthood and back again, I think a magical chromosome swap is doable.

Or I am over thinking this, and Ponies reproduce asexually by laying eggs, as Pinky may have recently illuminated.
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
Hm though if magic is the answer to why boys can be breeded.....still that means they would have to physically choose the gender of the child. That could eventually just lead to ponies being a one gendered race since if males don't have a monopoly on fertilization of eggs then what is their point. Since the race seems female dominate in the first place....males like I said could be limited to the children of excentircs that wanted to be different and magical mishaps
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Asgard314 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
They wouldn't be able to choose. If that magic did exist within that universe, it would just change that "X" chromosome to a "Y". That's it, it would be random whether or not the child inherited that chromosome.
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
Under what support do you have for this magic to be random in the first place. That would mean the ones who would design it purposly made it like that, which would make no sense. If you could create a spell to allow females to fertilze would you make the gender random. Honestly most would prefer to have a choice in the matter, or at least I would think so.
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Asgard314 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
It's not the magic that makes the gender of the child random, it's basic genetics. When a gamete (A sperm or an egg) is created, a cell splits apart into two clones, then those two clones split apart into 4 unique variations of half of the being's genes (Although, in the case of eggs, 3 of them die.). A spell that "Changed one's gender" would change that X or Y chromosome, and it would be random whether the gamete that made it through fertilization was X or Y.

Now, I guess with this logic it would be possible for a pony to magically filter out that gender selection part, though I don't see why you would. It's random because it's supposed to be random. Why would you want to pick and choose? (Unless there was a way to filter out genetic mental and deathly medical problems, that would be a God-send).

And... We're talking about a little girl's show... O_o How did it get to this point?
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
Um choosing your child's gender would be very convenient for most living beings, I assume most people go into this child raising thing with a preference for gender, since females seem to dominate this society (to what degree is never specified because this is a kid show) I assume the females would be the one to carry on the family name (thoguh how that would work in a homosexual relation I don't know). But this is all pure speculation...honestly intresting ideas can come up in a future where ponies become a one gendered race and how that would subtly change society.

Techincally we're talking about the unlicenced fan work of a little girl's show...but Honestly to me it's fun to speculate and think these sort of things. Honestly they give me ideas on stories I could write if I can just stop fricken blanking out when I try to write them down on a word document.
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Asgard314 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
True, and I'm actually writing a side story to this as I check DA. I've already got the first chapter done, I just need to TYPE it... =_=

You're actually a good debator (<--- I doubt this is spelled correctly). Also, I doubt the single gender society would happen, despite the availibility of such a spell the brain's chemistry wouldn't allow it. People are wired in such a way that they usually like one gender (Be it male or female), and it's rare when someone is attracted to both. Chances are, there would always be completely straight persons in any society, and the use of such a spell would most likely be primarily used by gay/lesbien couples in order to procreate.
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NewNova7 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011
This one made me cry...
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EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011
The moment I saw the name "Serenity" I started crafting in my head the hilarious idea of Serenity joining the Lunar Republic rebelion and her surviving the battle that essentially ends the war in the favor of the Solar Empire. Then skip 5 years later to where she is either essentially Mal or Zoe on a boat, wagon, or train. The idea kinda sputtered out around the point for the ship equivalent. In summary: Ponified Firefly.


Jake, Im gonna be level with you. You may become a monster again if you dont do the wedding and resolve Lance and Fluttershy some more with his prescence or abscence.
Dash's parents are a hint to a whole new story aren't they?
Dash is an orphan?
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theath2k Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Student General Artist
CHAPTAH FOURRR! now to go read. :icondashishappyplz:
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CodyMau Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
You are intriguing me good sir. ^_^

It appears pony weddings are pretty similar to traditional human weddings. Who actually performs the ceremonies and where it's held will be interesting to see. I suppose the act of giving the bride away isn't practiced or someone will have to take Lance's place. Or will they? DUN DUN DUN!

Shy is getting this pretty dress, what will Rainbow wear? Last chapter showed she can be pretty when she wants to, and Shy obviously finds pretty sexier than butch. Also with a term like "Filly Foolers" makes me wonder how often same sex marriages occur.

Pony society, the only place where you lover can whisper "I AM wearing underwear beneath this dress" and it's sexier that way. lol
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
Hm that is a good question, who does perform the ceramony if their does not seem to have any religions you can get a priest from in this world.

I just thinking Rainbow dash will wear the pony equivalent of a tuxedo. Just seems right since she's the manlier one.
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CodyMau Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm going to hazard a guess the mayor will be the one leading the ceremonies. I'm hoping a little bit that Dash will be in her own form of a dress but your probably right on the tux. lol
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Solomen Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It would be the mayor... unless they can get Celestia herself to do it :iconmolestiaplz:
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
Hm the princess would never get anything done if she had to oversee every marriage ceremony in the world so having the mayor doing it does make sense to a point....Unless Celestia and Luna have some clerics that don't show in the show.
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Solomen Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well I was just saying Celestia since Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash are bearers of the elements of harmony. Having Kindness marry Loyalty seems like something the princess would get involved in... unless Celestia is against same gendered couples :icontrollestia3plz: :iconbananasplz:
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
Hm considering the gender ratio for males and females is 8 females for one male...I imagine that same sex marrige is acepted if only because males are way too rare.
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PatRoison Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This was a beautiful chapter. I loved how Applebloom and Scootaloo were fighting over the bracelet bearer job. Very cute. Fluttershy is going to be a lovely bride and a great mom. I can't wait to see what Rainbow's parents are like.
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Wildroadfirefly Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
... I was feeling sad before
this cheered me right up

Keep going :D
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PinkstarMLP Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Student General Artist
am i the only one who thinks that this will be turned into clop fic by some one?
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CodyMau Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Well I guess I could try if you really want it that bad, probably written more porn than anyone else here. Still never done anything with ponies so that might be a little odd for me but I've faced greater challenges!
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PinkstarMLP Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Student General Artist
i never said i wanted it to turned into clop fic just the part with the panties definetly makes it soucy and also i dont read clopfics althouth pictures of sexy ponies are good like kloudsmutt's pictures
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CodyMau Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Gotcha, you don't want a clopfic. You want a GREAT clopfic! Well that's a lot of pressure but I can try to meet it! I'll be sure to credit you with its inspiration when it's done.
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Virotox Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
looking foward to SP: Honeymoon
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CodyMau Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Not so sure how much Sam would actually appreciate that. lol
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
*Shadowy figure in a cloak approaches* You didn't hear this from me...but I think Sam is okay with Clopfiction if its written well. *The figure looks around shiftly before disappearing into the night*
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CodyMau Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
*watches the cloaked pony-shaped figure disappear after the message*

... holy crap, I think Zecora just approved of me writing porn!? She sure talked different though.

[link]
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NotAGoodUsername360 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
...Hooded Pony?

XD
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PinkstarMLP Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011  Student General Artist
lol k
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jongyon7192p Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
I know Fluttershy's supposed to be really kind. But her parents... it's like they tormented the hell out of her and pretty much got away with everything.

Her mother's dead so there's really nothing we can do about that. It may have been just desperation, but what she did to kill herself was really selfish. The choice to kill herself is understandable. She probably wasn't in the position to think about what her loved ones will think, and I have no idea what pain she must've been going through so I really have nothing to say about that. But making her own daughter a murderer... Screaming at her to stab her own mother... That's sick...

As for her father, it also feels like he got away with everything he's done to her. At the very least I really hope he'll redeem himself somehow. I don't know if that's even possible, but I just hope. He never even apologized for what he did, didn't he? And with how Fluttershy keeps putting it, he still thinks he's absolutely right for what he's done. They both think everything is Fluttershy's fault and that she deserves all that torture. I don't know what he thinks about Fluttershy 'forgiving' him, though. That was kinda ambiguous. Almost like he just ignored the part that even implied he did something bad.

Now that I think about it, does Lance even know what his wife did to make Fluttershy kill her?
...he doesn't, does he...
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Asgard314 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
For the mom: That wasn't her mother at that point. That was the shell of a mare that was in an ungodly amount of pain and was desprate enough to do anything to get rid of it. Her mother probably never would have done that if she had been in her right mind.

For Lance: Go read the stories that Jake has added to the canon. He gets a (sort-of) comeuppance.
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jongyon7192p Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
Her mom wasn't in her right mind. True. Doesn't make it any less bad. And if you think about it, her action at that point was the cause of pretty much ALL of Fluttershy's problems.

I read Reunion. My only complaint about that story is that IT'S STILL NOT FUCKING COMPLETED!!! I fucking LOVE it! I really want to see the next chapter!!! I love this WHOLE series! Just so awesome!
Anyway by the end of Reunion, I hope to finally see what I always wanted to see from Lance...
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
Sure t heir's a way to make Fluttershy mother pay for her crimes....it just requires getting Twilight to forgo her morality to learn the art of necromancy, and various other forbidden magic's that can drag a soul from the afterlife back into a physical body. Then make fluttershy zombie mother serve the said pony and her family for the rest of FLuttershy's clan's existence. Course the general disaceptence of such things would make everyone fear twilight and be the point where celestia fire's Twilight as her student.

Hm that be an interesting story, twilight learning forbidden magic and the repercussions of such an action.

As for Lance, Honestly he is a Karma Houdini but only by Fluttershy's choice. At any time she could go open with the story and ruin him. Especially since Celestia owes Fluttershy a couple of favors for helping with saving esquestria/ponyville/Twilight's life several times already. But he basically the best of what he does and if Fluttershy puts Lance in prison, she would have the blood of the people he could have cured on her hand. I know it sounds morally wrong to let such a person free just because he is useful, but the logic is sound by him being free people who would have otherwise died will live. Of course whether that's a good thing or not is another discussion altogether.
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jongyon7192p Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
Necromancy...? Cmon... Besides, Fluttershy herself probably wouldn't want anything bad like that happen to her mother. Is it a bad thing? Seeing your mother again? Well, if she's literally a mindless zombie, then I guess, yeah.

As for Lance, hearing about the story about him saving thirty lives who were sure to die, I don't think I want him to go to jail. He's kind of an interesting character. I notice, at least in SP: Reunion, he's serious about his hopital work and really cares about saving the patients' lives. Yet, he's a horrible monster just to Fluttershy. And he still is! I just want him to fucking apologize! Feel bad for what he's done! That shouldn't be so much to ask for! But I guess I can be sure that'll happen by the end of Reunion.
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
Hm I never said a mindless zombie, it's more cruel if you drag the bodies soul in the after life and force it to "live" in the rotting corpse of her own body.


and for Lance honestly I'll hsve to go read reuninion, but it seems impracticable to really expect an apology. Honestly in real life how many abusive parents appolgize for their actions when their children grow up.
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Jurodan Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
To be fair, in real life, how many abusive parents are forced to enter a horrific freudian nightmare world that explicitely spells out "you are a horrible, abusive fuckup and this is why you need to repent for being an abusive douche"?
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
Touche
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jongyon7192p Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011
Whether he'll apologizes depends on what he goes through in Reunion. Whatever it is, it'll be a strong experience, even changing him somehow. Still not sure why he's having those dreams, but I really hope it's something to do with torturing Fluttershy. Even indirectly.
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griever789 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
Hm preety good chapter...I always like these small moments where people can just sit and talk casually in a story.

Hm Lance, Blitz and Serenity.....not sure it fit's pony naming conventions (well except blitz) but meh it's not like there is a hard and fast rules on it or something.

Hm still when I think of senerinty I tend to think of yugioh where their was a character named serenity their....Makes me think Fluttershy daughter would be doomed to blindness since that be a good way to screw this state of happiness (one rule of literature, no character can be happy or well off until the end of their story where we no longer need to torment them.)
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Riddel52 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
I was happily reading this right until they mentioned Rainbow's parents...

Is that hinting at what I think it is?
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thecrazyd Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist
WOOOOP like it. noe i just hope y'all wont break the forth wall again and attach fluttershy's father (if he does go) if so I WANNA COME. I want to know what the wedding cake will taste like. HAIL PINKIE PIE'S CAKE'S!!!! WEEEEEEEEEEEEE moo
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