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Chapter 2

Fluttershy panted heavily as she lay on the cloud. Her wings were sore and her energy was low. She wasn't sure how much longer she could keep this up, it was exhausting her.

"Are you finished already? We've barely gotten any flying in today!" Rainbow sighed, hovering over the tired Fluttershy.

"I'm sorry…" Fluttershy squeaked as she shakily got up onto all four hooves again.

"You're never going to keep your grades up if you don't get into better shape." Rainbow said flying down and forcing her on to her feet, spreading her wings and getting her into a flight stance, much to Fluttershy's dismay. "Okay, give me another speed lap around the loops. And GO." Rainbow yelled out before blowing on a whistle.

Fluttershy let out a soft cry before flying forward as quickly as he wings could carry her. Her wings had developed early and grown larger, but they weren't very strong despite that. Rainbow could only groan at Fluttershy's top speed, not even being a third of what she could pull off in the air.

Fluttershy grunted as she flew through the floating loops, trying to beat her old time, her body aching and screaming at her with every beat of her wings. She felt herself slowing down as her body forced its actions. She panted through the last hoop, before finally landing and collapsing at the start line, gasping for breath.

"Ugh, alright, I can see you're tired." Rainbow rubbed her face a little annoyed, "You're really out of shape Fluttershy, take five minutes to rest then we'll do some lighter exercises. You won't be able to graduate if you stay so out of shape though."

"I-I-I'm…s-sorry…" Fluttershy panted between gasps of air. Her body wanted nothing more than to rest, this much physical exertion was beyond her.

"And that's another thing, stop apologizing for every little thing." Rainbow said rolling her eyes. "I'm going to go fetch you some water, you just relax." Rainbow quickly flew off, at a speed that if Fluttershy had blinked she would've missed where she went.

"W-Wow…" she muttered softly to herself as she watched Dash fly off. Nothing ever seemed to slow her down, she could fly anywhere at any speed at any time. Her mind constantly told her it was impossible for her to ever reach any level like Dash, but she wanted to, even if it was just once…

"Huh?" Something gently landed on the cloud in front of Fluttershy. It was a letter that had fallen from the sky. Fluttershy looked up, trying to see if she could spot who dropped it, but the sky was clear for the moment, with the occasional pegasus passing by. She carefully picked up the letter, examining it.

"It's addressed to me…" She said surprised, seeing her name written on the front of it. She carefully opened the letter, before pulling out the folded paper inside. She opened the letter and began to read:

Dear Fluttershy,

I have admired you from afar for some time now, but I'm too shy to admit my feelings to you in person. I don't know if I'll ever have the courage to face you directly about these feelings, but I had to at least let you know. Ever since I saw your sleek, beautiful yellow coat and glorious pink mane, you've inspired a confidence inside of me. Your grace and beauty are second to none, your eyes show such deep love and compassion that I could get lost if I were to look into them.

Your voice is that of an Angel, your tenderness makes me shiver and your being fills me with glee. I know this might seem confusing to you, but my heart throbs in your very presence. I don't think you've ever noticed me and that's okay, I can live happily just knowing you're there. So please continue to live happily and hopefully one day I'll be able to at least say hello to you.

Your Secret Admirer

Fluttershy read the letter twice. She didn't know who sent the letter or that anypony felt that way about her. It was a new experience.

One that made her…angry.

She folded the letter back into its original shape and tore it into two pieces. She then tore the letter in half again.

As she went to tear it for a third time she stopped herself, realizing what she was doing. She stared at the torn letter in her hooves, shocked at her own actions. A pony had tried to tell her that they cared about her…and her initial reaction was to destroy it?

"Why did I…" she asked confused. She had no idea what had compelled her to tear the letter. She felt guilt riddle her at what she had done. She tender folded the remaining pieces of the paper and carefully tucked it into her mane. She would hold onto it, it was something precious someone had given her, even if she had destroyed it…

"Alright, here." A bottle of water was suddenly thrust into Fluttershy's face, much to her surprise as she fell backwards onto her back. "Yeesh, it's just water you scaredy cat." Rainbow rolled her eyes a little.

"O-Oh…thank you…" Fluttershy said gently taking the water and drinking it slowly.

"Okay, we're going to continue in a few minutes, so make sure you're ready." Rainbow said flying around in thought about what to do for Fluttershy.

'I wonder who sent me the letter…' Fluttershy sat there in confusion as she relaxed, trying to prepare for more training.


"Ah, that was refreshing." Rainbow Dash said, stretching as she walked back into the living room. Her coat sparkled from her fresh cleaning, as she checked on how Fluttershy was doing. To her surprise, the kitchen was already starting to look normal again.

"Wow, you work fast Fluttershy." Rainbow said walking up to the pegasus that was busy scrubbing away at the leftover soup on the floor.

"Oh, thank you." Fluttershy smiled looking over her shoulder at Rainbow. "And sorry again about this whole mess, I hope you still had a good time." Fluttershy meekly stated with a smile as her brush finished cleaning the last of the soup, before putting the brush back into her bucket of soapy water.

"Oh sure, it was a fun visit." Rainbow Dash waved her hoof, "Good food and a good laugh, it was worth the trip." Rainbow chuckled.

"Well I'm happy, if you had a good time then it was a good evening." Fluttershy smiled as she brushed her hooves off on a towel by her sink before turning to Rainbow, "Thanks for having dinner with me."

"Ah, no problem. We should do it again sometime, though perhaps with less projectile foods." Rainbow chuckled.

"I'd like that very much." Fluttershy smiled happily.

"Well hey, before it gets too late I'm gonna head home. You seem to have things wrapped up here, and I need to get to planning the weather forecast for next week, as much as I hate boring stuff, this was fun enough to make up for it." Rainbow explained, "Was nice hanging out, we should do it again soon."

"Yes we should." Fluttershy smiled happily, "Oh, before you go!" Fluttershy said remembering, walking over to the counter and picking up a brown bag, before bringing it over to Rainbow, "My desserts managed to escape the destruction. I'd really like you to take them home."

"Oh Awesome!" Rainbow said taking the bag smiling, "I'm sure they'll be delicious." Rainbow chuckled, before turning and walking towards the door, "Seeya later Fluttershy." Rainbow said turning while waving.

"Bye Rainbow dash." Fluttershy waved back smiling happily. She heard the door close as she let out a happy sigh. "Good, she had a good time. And I'm almost finished cleaning." Fluttershy said walking back into the living room. She looked at the bird cage, sitting there in a huff with his arms crossed sat Angel Bunny.

"Alright Angel, have you learned your lesson?" Fluttershy asked walking up the cage. Angel looked over his shoulder, looking annoyed at Fluttershy, his arms still crossed. "Alright, you can come out now." She opened the cage, the rabbit instantly hopping out and running up the stairs.

"I wonder what he's off in a hurry about." Fluttershy asked herself curiously. She just shrugged it off though, walking over to her couch and laying down on it letting out a quick sigh of relaxation. She wished the night had gone better, but it had turned out well enough to feel happy with it. She relaxed on her couch, letting the pillows comfort her.

A loud, throat clearing cough came from in front of her, opening her eyes to look down at the source. Angel stood there, holding out torn paper up to Fluttershy.

"Huh? What's this Angel?" Fluttershy asked curiously, taking the paper from Angel. She examined the paper carefully. It was old, the paper had been crumpled several times, the color was fading from age, and the writing was starting to fade. But it was an old letter that she had read many times throughout her life.

"…Angel…you went through my private drawers again." Fluttershy groaned as she looked at her bunny friend. The bunny hopped onto the couch next to her, uncaring for her groaning. He tapped the paper in her hooves repeatedly. "…What about this letter Angel? It's a memory of my foalhood, but it's not really important…"

Angel just tapped the paper again and then pointed at Fluttershy. He then imitated two people sitting at a table, before imitating an explosion.

"Huh? Are you trying to say…things would end badly between me and Rainbow Dash?" Fluttershy said, doing her best to interpret her bunny friend. Angel nodded his head. "But you don't know that…Rainbow Dash could like me…maybe…one day…in my dreams…" Fluttershy looked up at the ceiling.

Angel put a paw to his face in frustration. He tapped his foot against her, causing her to look at him again. Angel pointed at Fluttershy, then to the torn up note, then to his head and twirled his hand.

"Angel…a-are you trying to say…that I don't know what I want?" Angel nodded his head. "But…I've grown up a lot from when I got this letter Angel." She said looking at the torn up letter, "I understand a lot more about…emotions and…a-and love…" Fluttershy still seemed hesitant to say the word, "B-Besides…that doesn't excuse you from making a mess of my kitchen mister."

Angel just sighed as he hopped off the couch. He was done trying to help for the day, hopping off to his bed once more.

"…Oh…well…I should probably take a bath before it's too late." She said looking at her mane. She'd gotten most of the flour off, but she still needed to properly clean the rest of herself. "Alright, a good soak, and then its bedtime." Fluttershy got up from the couch, heading for her bathroom

Fluttershy bolted awake by the sudden loud knocking on her door. It sounded like somepony was trying to break her door down.

"H-Hold on! I-I'm coming!" Fluttershy called out as loudly as she could, quickly hopping out of her bed and going over to her dresser; she grabbed her brush and quickly did up her mane. The knocking continued without stopping the entire time. Fluttershy quickly made her way to the door, opening it quickly. Several knocks hit her head as she collapsed to the floor.

"Oh, Ah'm so sorry sugar cube." Applejack's voice said as the earth pony helped pick Fluttershy up.

"I-It's okay Applejack…" Fluttershy shook her head lightly, then looked up at her orange friend, "What's the matter Applejack?"

"Oh, no problem, but exciting news!" Applejack grinned, "It's Pinkie Pie! She's back from her trip! And she's hostin' a big party over at Sugar Cube Corner!"

"W-Wait, Pinkie's back!?" Fluttershy said in surprise, "She's been gone a month though."

"Right! So we're celebrating her return! Come on, the party's already started!" Applejack said before rushing back into town.

"O-Oh! W-Wait for me!" Fluttershy cried out, quickly following after Applejack.

"WAHOO! Cupcakes and Streamers and Friends oh my!" Pinkie Pie cried out, bouncing around the entire party. "Ohmygosh I missed you! And you! And you! Oh my gosh I missed everypony!" She bounced from Pony to Pony, giving each a big hug.

"FLUTTERSHY!" She pounced the yellow pegasus, knocking her to the ground, "Oh I missed you and the other girls the most! I'm sooooooooo glad you came to my welcome back party!" The excited pink pony rubbed her face against Fluttershy like crazy.

"I-Its…N-nice to s-see you…t-too Pinkie!" Fluttershy gasped against Pinkie's hug, "B-But…I need..aaaaaaair…" Fluttershy gasped as best she could.

"Oh! My bad!" Pinkie laughed, letting go of Fluttershy, letting her stand back up, "How've you been? I haven't seen you in what seems like forever! You have to tell me everything that's been happening since I've been gone!" Pinkie talked a mile a minute as she normally did.

"O-Oh…N-Nothing much really…" Fluttershy rubbed her hoof over her leg, "It's been really quiet without around. How about you? Did you have a good trip?"

"Oh of course! It wasn't the best trip ever, but it was so nice hanging out with my sister and parents again! They really helped me feel like me again, and once I was ready to come back I just HAD to come back and throw a big party for all my wonderful friends!" Pinkie bounced in place, "I'm just so…so…SO HAPPY!" Pinkie cheered.

"Well, I'm so glad to hear that Pink-"

"Pinks! You're back!" Fluttershy was interrupted by the cry of Rainbow Dash, who quickly flew over to the two of them.

"RAINBOW DASH!" Pinkie cried out, jumping up and hugging her dear friend, "I missed you and the other girls so much!" Pinkie swung on the flying pegasus, who struggled to hold them both up, before the two girls crashed to the ground, laughing together.

"It's great to see you again Pinkie!" Rainbow said standing up, while still chuckling, "You wouldn't believe how boring it's been around here without you! I didn't realize how much you liven the place up." Rainbow waved her hoof in exaggeration.

"Awwww, I'm sorry Rainbow. I promise that I won't be going anywhere for a long time now!" Pinkie giggled, smiling with a big grin.

"You better not." Rainbow chuckled, bouncing the end of Pinkie's mane with her hoof, "After all you still have that ribbon in your hair, so you better not forget how much you appreciate us."

"Oh, I'll never forget it ever again!" Pinkie smiled happily.

Fluttershy watched the two close friends chat away so naturally. She smiled as best she could if either of them looked at her, but she couldn't help but notice how naturally they were able to strike up a conversation. Rainbow Dash looked so natural talking to Pinkie and Pinkie matched her energy so easily.

She struggled to bring up a conversation with Rainbow, often too shy to think of something to talk about, she struggled enough inviting her to dinner last night. Plus Rainbow was always spending time with Pinkie since they always seemed to have fun goofing off together. Then if it wasn't Pinkie Pie, she'd be spending time with Applejack, always competing about one thing or another.

In fact, the last time she remembered Rainbow Dash coming to her to hang out was when she needed her to cheer for her at the best young flyer's competition.

'I guess she only comes to me when she needs me…' Fluttershy felt a little dejected. But this was still a happy occasion, Pinkie Pie was back. She walked over to the refreshments table, filling up a glass of punch for herself.

"Oh hey Fluttershy," Twilight's familiar voice came, as she walked next to the table, "It's nice to see you could make it on such short notice."

"Oh, of course, it's…nice to see Pinkie Pie again." It wasn't a lie, but she had to hide her jealousy. "I forgot how much fun her parties are."

"I'm relieved that she's okay, she left so suddenly. I was worried about her." Twilight explained to Fluttershy.

"…I was too." Again, it was true. 'But…I forgot how much time she spent with Rainbow Dash.' "I'm glad she made it home safe. The town will be more fun again." Fluttershy smiled happily at Twilight.

"It certainly will be hard to keep things quiet again." Twilight chuckled, "But I'm just happy everything worked out. I'm going to go play some games, want to join me?" Twilight asked.

"Uhm…sure, that sounds fun." Fluttershy smiled back at her friend.

'What am I going to do…' Fluttershy asked herself, watching Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash sharing a huge laugh as she walked with Twilight.
The plot thickens~

Oh the shenanigans I have planned later. I hope your enjoying the ride there. ^_^

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bruiser128 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
This confirms that it's takes place after the first Silent Ponyville story you wrote right?
BlueBlazFire71 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
the word "cupcake" still sends shivers down my spine.....
Queen-Saturn Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
You're not the only pony O_O
Fighterx345 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012
Oh God, the bow in Pinkie's mane... *Flashback to Silent Ponyville*
*Whispering to myself* The horror..........
commander672 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012
"Fluttershy watched the two close friends chat away so naturally. She smiled as best she could if either of them looked at her, but she couldn't help but notice how naturally they were able to strike up a conversation. Rainbow Dash looked so natural talking to Pinkie and Pinkie matched her energy so easily."

This paragraph screams "I need a Thesaurus" Although that might just be Fluttershy's way of thinking.
Ahiam94 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
I'm really enjoying the fact that it's set in the same universe as Silent Poniville. It makes the whole story that much more great!!
MegamanSora Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2011
I like the fact that you've been mixing together your continuity. From SP, to this, to SP2, then the sequel to this.

And there's probably a third one in the making at this point. *facehoof*
TanithLipsky Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011
BentlyHD Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
sweet there's the silent ponyville 1 tie in! It is pretty sweet to see pinkie is back to being her normal happy self in this after everything, though jealous flutter shy makes me feel a tad sad I have my fingers crossed for her,

Also happy pinkie pie I cant wait to keep reading, I love breaking the fourth wall its almost as fun as breaking doors! Come to think of it I think silent hill was why my world of darkness character started breaking doors, so many locked/ damaged doors.

er right sorry anyways to the next chapter and onward!
rhhay Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011
Wow.. this is so much more meaningful after reading Silent Ponyville. At first this was just like a regular story, but in reality it's deeper than I could've thought.
jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I did write this story with Silent Ponyville 2 in mind. That's the power of having continuity, it allows you to make things deeper than they would be by themselves =3
Guncraft Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011
Another great chapter. I especially like how it's not simply a "omg I realize I now love you so much let's totally make out" kind of love story, but one that's shaping up to at least have some conflict between the characters. It looks like fluttershy will have to fight for her love =P
EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011
Is the note in the flashback related to the candy bar incident in Silent Ponyville 2?
jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No, the candy bar scene isn't present in Too Shy for a Rainbow. She got the candy bar BEFORE receiving that note. Which is why she tore it up :3
EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
I got to chapter 4 before seeing this reply. Though figureing it out via reading or author word of mouth does explain her reaction very well.
The flashbacks had a sad overtone since I read SP2 before this. Good story.
Raxadian Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011
Well, poor Fluttershy -_-
TheDragonWarlock Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011
Ooo a love triangle.
Ziddia Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This story is great! :)
TheCrackerBrony Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011
Sure do know how to form cliffhangers, keep this up you're excellent!
romadragon Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011
CodyMau Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Chapter felt shorter than the last, nice to see Pinkie back and fully recovered.

After reading the first chapter I thought about it and I'm on the asshole rabbit's side. I mean lets assume for a moment that Rainbow Dash is even into girls (which that hasn't been brought up as an issue so I'm assuming yes?) but I just couldn't see such a relationship working out between these personalities. Poor Shy.

Noticed a few grammar mistakes but otherwise good as always.
jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It was shorter, by two pages....and was ORIGINALLY PLANNED TO BE SHORTER. But so was Chapter 2 of Silent Ponyville, so it's not a bad thing heh. But I have no idea why my notes thought that the one idea was long enough for a single chapter, so I made it longer.

Grammar mistakes are evil, and I usually try to avoid them. Sadly myself re-reading and two other prereaders don't catch them all the time, so hopefully I'll be more careful in the future.

As for your notes, you're very attentive. I shall bring up and answer a lot of points throughout this story X3
avlblu Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011
I was wondering when Silent Ponyville would crop up. Good to see a recovered Pinkie.

As for the main plot, well...I'm still reserving judgment. I like the light touch you're employing with the shipping bits and you've at least got me curious with the flashback's mystery.
jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I really don't expect the story to be anywhere near as good as Silent Ponyville. I'm making it good, yes, but you can't beat deep symbolism that easily with something like this haha.

The story is more about light-hearted fun and goofiness and just enjoying what is. After all, there'll be plenty of more deep symbolic-juiciness to be had later ^_^
avlblu Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011
Well, I'm reserving judgment more for the brevity of available story than for any other reason. If only for the drastic difference in subject and genre, I certainly wouldn't think that this and its canonical (fanonical?) sibling are particularly comparable.

I'm enjoying it so far, though. Let me be clear on that.
JamesEM73 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
And there's the continuity nod!

The flashback was pretty interesting too. I think I detect a hint of foreshadowing maybe? YAY FORESHADOWING!
PatRoison Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I suspect Rainbow is the admirer because Angel Bunny wouldn't be so focused on that old love letter.

I look forward to the next installment.
LoganBrony Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
The secret admirer is obviously Derpy. That's why she dropped that flower to Fluttershy in Fall Weather Friends. Seriously though I am really enjoying this story. Can't wait to see where it goes. There aren't many stories told from Fluttershy's perspective so this is refreshing.
griever789 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
perhaps the secret admirer is Angel Lol.
Salnax Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
The secret admirer was Gilda!

...well at least I have some originality...
RangerGxi Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
I wonder who the secret admirer is... I bet it's Rainbow dash.

Anyway, Im really enjoying this so far. :)
Xortberg Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011  Hobbyist
Rainbow Dash was the secret admirer. I'm calling it right now.

Anywho, great chapter, and as griever said the continuity nod to Silent Ponyville was really nicely done. I do hate Angel bunny so much, though. What few redeeming qualities he had left after reading 'Progress' have just gone down the drain with his romantic meddling.
griever789 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
Hm I guess this chapter answers my earlier question I had last chapter, whether this was about young filly Fluttershy and rainbow dash back when they just got their cutie mark or the older ones. Makes things a bit clearer now, Like I said the time shift was kind of unclear (Though that might have been on purpose to fulfill some sort of highly symbolic meaning)

I also the subtle continuity from your previous story, it makes me wonder if this is simple a brief interlude of sorts that will lead to the next story.

Hm as for the story itself, you certainly got it posed to be a love stuck mine field. With Pinkie pie looking to be some sort of rival to form a sort of love triangle. Not to mention a secret admirer of some kind, I have to wonder how well the guy/gal will react to such a brutal rejection. Not to mention the old torn up letter Angel brings up, I have to wonder if it foreshadowing of this story or the next or simply a red hearing to make people guess.

You got the settings for an interesting shipping story, perhaps something beyond most of the fluff ship stories i usually read (Not that I don't mind fluff on some occasion,)
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