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Epilogue


"Okay, so what're some things we both like doing?" Rainbow asked looking at a blank sheet of paper.

"W-Well…I really like watching you practice." Fluttershy thought.

"And I always like showing off." Rainbow said writing down 'Flight practice' on the paper.

"You really like my cooking…so dinners are always an option." Fluttershy said while thinking about possible new recipes to try for Rainbow Dash.

"Full bellies, check." Rainbow said writing down 'Dinner' on the paper.

"Uhm…we both like hanging out with our friends, going to Pinkie Pie's parties and getting a good sleep." Fluttershy listed off the most obvious things first.

"Check, check and check." Rainbow said listing off 'Hanging out', 'Parties' and 'Napping'.

"Uhm…" Fluttershy said tapping her chin thoughts, "How do you feel about the weather you make for Ponyville?"

"Well, I love having a good thunderstorm! Flying past lightning as it strikes is one of the most intense things ever! The wind and rain in your mane is just incredible!" Rainbow grinned thinking about it.

"O-Oh…I just kind of prefer it when there's a light summer shower of sorts. Watching the calm rain is rather soothing." Fluttershy said thinking about it.

"Eh…close enough." Rainbow said writing down 'Weather fun' on the paper. "What about pranks?" Rainbow asked looking up at Fluttershy.

"Oh…uhm…well I guess as long as it's in good fun and no one is offended that they're okay…I-I'm just not good at coming up with ones." Fluttershy admitted.

"I'm counting it. You could join me and Pinkie in doing some awesome prank fests." Rainbow chuckled as she wrote down 'Pranks'.

"Well…I know you're not too interested in taking care of animals like I do…how are you about swimming?" Fluttershy remembered enjoying a good swim every so often.

"Swimming? Well…it's not as fun as flying, but I suppose its fun, can't say I have anything against it." Rainbow wrote down 'Swimming'. "I know you're not much for competitions like me and Applejack tend to have, but is there anything physical you enjoy?"

Fluttershy couldn't help but blush at the way Rainbow worded that, "Oh uhm…W-Well…" Fluttershy rubbed a hoof over her leg as she thought, "P-Physical…I-I like h-hugging and cuddling…being close b-but…I'm not very strong or anything. I-I'll mostly be a cheerleader for you…a-as best I can though."

"Mmm…" Rainbow chewed the pencil in thought, "I've never been too big on stuff like that…" she tilted her head while crossing her hooves, "But, we are together now. I'll have to try some of that with you, see if I like it." Rainbow wrote down 'Hugging?' on the paper.

Fluttershy blushed again, thinking happily at the thought of cuddling with Rainbow Dash. She was really sticking to her word and giving this a serious try, it really made her happy.

Suddenly there were several knocks on Fluttershy's door.

"Oh, I'll get it." Fluttershy quickly got up, heading for the door. Just as she was about to open the door, it flew open suddenly.

"Oh, there you are Fluttershy-dear. It took me forever but I was finally able to get your new dress looking as good as new. I even spruced up some of the finer edges, so it should shine ever more now." Rarity said walking into Fluttershy's house with a white box.

"O-Oh. Thank you Rarity, I appreciate it." Fluttershy smiled.

"Now, you didn't give me any of the details about what happened that night, so you simply MUST tell me now. How'd it go? I can't imagine it going too well with the state your dress was in." Rarity said before turning to see Rainbow Dash looking at Rarity with a pencil in her mouth, "Oh, good evening Rainbow Dash, I wasn't expecting to see you in Fluttershy's house."

"Well I'm here." Rainbow grinned before putting the pencil down.

"Oh…well uhm…about that night…" Fluttershy said, not sure what to say. She looked nervously at Rainbow Dash. "You see…I…" Rainbow could see Fluttershy's invisible question of 'What do I do?'

"Hey, go ahead and tell her Fluttershy, she is our friend, I'm sure she'll understand." Rainbow Dash with a grin, not really wanting to hide anything.

"What? You've already told Rainbow Dash?" Rarity said amazed, "Oh you simply MUST tell me now!"

"W-Well…I didn't really tell her…s-see, it's like this…" Fluttershy said nervously beginning her story.






"-And then she kissed me saying 'What do you think?' And we just kind of went from there." Fluttershy finished her story, scrapping her hoof against the ground.

"Yea, it was shortly after that the Unicorn team came up and gave Fluttershy a full refund for the show. Man, those guys had egg on their faces." Rainbow laughed nonchalantly.

"O-Oh…you mean…the pony you were trying to impress was…Rainbow Dash?" Rarity said still trying to process everything.

"Well…yea…I-I'm sorry I wasn't forthcoming about it…" Fluttershy apologized softly.

"Good Heaven's Fluttershy." Rarity said shaking her head, "Why didn't you tell me sooner?"

"Hey, what's with that tone?" Rainbow asked not liking the way Rarity said that.

"I-I'm sorry Rarity…I was just nervous." Fluttershy rubbed her leg gently.

"Oh my, no WONDER your night was terrible." Rarity sighed, "I gave you dating advice on how to attract a Gentlecolt, not Rainbow Dash. Rainbow Dash is far from a good Gentlecolt." Rarity said in her usual sophisticated matter.

"Hey! I can be fancy when I need to, I just don't feel like it." Rainbow Dash huffed.

"Never the less, I gave the wrong advice for the suitor Fluttershy was trying to attract." Rarity addressed Rainbow Dash before turning to Fluttershy with a smile, "And something simple would've been much better for attracting Rainbow Dash. Perhaps something with a rainbow flare to it, something that would visualize to her 'I'm thinking of you'. Yes, it truly would make a gorgeous piece." Rarity said smiling as she thought about it.

"S-so wait…you're okay with Rainbow Dash and I…dating?" Fluttershy said a little surprised.

"But of course dear, whatever made you think I wouldn't?" Rarity smiled at her dear friend, with a warming smile.

"Oh…I guess I was just nervous that you or the others wouldn't like the idea…" Fluttershy admitted.

"Oh darling, you shouldn't ever feel that way. We are your friends! We love you for who you are, and if you like mares then that's fine by us. If it's what makes you happy, then of course we support you!" Rarity said happily, "Though I must admit, I was hoping you'd fall for someone with a touch more grace, but not everypony is me I suppose." Rarity chuckled.

"Oh haha, very funny." Rainbow Dash rolled her eyes before walking up to Fluttershy, before showing Rarity a big grin, "But if you wouldn't mind, Fluttershy and I were in the middle of some important 'relationship' business." This comment elicited a large blush from Fluttershy as she tried to hide her face in her mane.

"Oh, but of course. How rude of me, I'll go ahead and escort myself out." Rarity smiled before heading back for the door. "Oh, and one more thing Rainbow Dash."

"Yea, what is it?" Dash asked raising an eyebrow.

"You better treat Fluttershy right. She's my dearest friend and I would hate to see anything sadden her." Rarity glanced at Rainbow from the corner of her eye.

"You kiddin' me? I'd rather lose my wings then do anything to hurt Fluttershy." Rainbow grinned at Rarity.

"Very good. I leave her to you then." Rarity nodded before her horn lit up, closing the door behind her.

"T-Thank you…Rainbow…t-that means a lot to me." Fluttershy blushed as she spoke quietly.

"Hey, what's a marefriend for?" Rainbow grinned before nuzzling up against Fluttershy. "Now come on, we need to finish this list before I figure out a good date to take you on." Rainbow quickly walked back to where she had placed the paper before sitting down.

"Y-You? T-Taking me…on a date?" Fluttershy sounded surprised.

"Well yea. I'm taking this seriously, so it's only fair that I take you out sometimes." Rainbow picked up the pencil before scribbling on the paper again, "Besides, I may not know a whole lot about being mushy and romantic, but it requires effort on both parts right? You put the effort in, so it's my turn now."

Fluttershy blushed as a smile came to her face. "I guess you're right." Fluttershy happily headed towards Rainbow again. However, this time she sat down next to Rainbow, nuzzling up against her. A soft blush appeared on Rainbow's face.

"H-Hey, that tickles." Rainbow chuckled as Fluttershy nuzzled in close.

'I have the best marefriend ever.' Fluttershy thought to herself happily.
And there we go, a nice short little epilogue to help tie things together better for you peeps. And hopefully give you some insight as to how this relationship will play out, at least for now~

Plot twists in the horizon of a new story? Possibly. I got some fun ideas to be had till then.
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GentalmanBoxer Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
.... This is the best story eve- *heart explodes from too much cuteness*
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Honeytongue22 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013
2nd favourit MLP shipping fan-fic [after 'Allegerzzia', though certainly not as long]. There is certainly something about the Flutter-Dash shipping that seems natural/believable to me. And unlike most shipping there is a strong 'Yin and Yang' element to it. Bravo to you sir. Thank you for writing this.
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DevynRaye Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
CUTE!
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CanisLupusFan Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Although I'm not really into lesbian couples between real life humans, I found it very, VERY adorable between ponies, especially these particular two mane 6 characters.
I've read shipping between Rainbow Dash and Applejack, but that just wouldn't seem to work out since they're always competing. Now, Fluttershy has just what Dash needed to become complete emotionally and to take care of herself.
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lunchymunchies Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
This is easily the 2nd best romance story I've ever read. The characters feel like real, actual people and the talent and the motivation of the fan base never ceases to amaze me. The writing of "Too Shy For A Rainbow" easily surpasses the romantic aspects in any story I've ever read (except for that one story), even those written by professionals. Why they get fame and opportunity and not you should serve both as a lesson to all of us that we should not ever think of bettering ourselves and as an ever-present and maddening reminder of the meaninglessness of believing in ourselves, as well as other people.

I give this fan fiction 113 thumbs up!
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Theroboemu Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
=) Great story bro. I didn't think I could really get along with the whole shipping thing, but I decided to give reading this a try. Turns out, you can write almost anything and it will be amazing.
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Fighterx345 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012
Well, for my own sanity I'll imagine Dash is a boy. In fact, I thought Dash was a boy before I watched MLP AND even during the first 5 episodes of season 1. I'd get really confused when they'd refer to Dash as a she because I completely thought she was a boy. Anyhoo, onto Silent Ponyville 2 to flush my mind with even more screwed up crap, I guess.
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TheDragonWarlock Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012
Cool way to end it all.
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Dumchet720 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012
Daaaaaaaaaw that was cute. I was expecting Dashie to have a stutter fest if Fluttershy kissed and nuzzled her, But im not the writer xD

but all things sweet also goes sour, onto Silent Ponyville 2
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demonjack123 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Student Filmographer
MORE!
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Rawic Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
the first silent ponyville gave me nightmares no joke! and this made me go AAAAAAAAWWWWWWWEEEEEHHHHHH throughout the entire thing! oddly enough "Too Shy for a Rainbow" reminded me a lot of past dating efforts and ive suggested this story to a few of my friends and even the ones against shipping said that they loved it! sooooo looking forward to reading the rest of the stories you have out there!
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MrSmartusername Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012
daaaaaaawwwww is all i have to say

and this has got to be my favorite shipping story well done good sir :iconclapplz:
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Ahiam94 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Awesome Shipping Story, and now ONWARD TO SILENT PONIVILLE 2!!!
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Phishstrangler75 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
Fluttershy is the pegasus version of Toki Wartooth, who is the Scandinavian version of myself. Hugging and kissing those beeyoutiful goils!
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demonjack123 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Student Filmographer
LOL TOKI
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Ancient-lust Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2011
Gah! I love this more than a pink haired pony loves a rainbow but i really wish the last bit there went like:
"H-Hey(so on) - RD -yada- as FShy nuzzled in close
Fluttershy's eyes drifted shut with the last sight of Rainbow Dash as she flipped the pencil around advancing the worn eraser to the page. Fluttshy listened with fading senses to the short rustle of the pink tip, a sound long enough only to remove a single character, before feeling her marefrind's head lean to rest on her own. <FShy's last part> (what could this possibly imply?! remember the '?')
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That would've been adorable, but you do have to give their relationship time to advance too. Rainbow Dash isn't the type to get mushy quickly X3
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goldsonic1 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
Awesome story!!!!
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NOTknownlight Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Okay now. Huge, huge props for how you pulled off the romance here. I love it. Rainbow analysing her way through the whole thing is perfectly in character, and, more importantly, doing romance this way let you keep the characters' personalities intact during the romantic bits, rather than characters becoming little more than lips with a body attached like most stories I read. People read stories because they care about the characters, so keeping characters acting like themselves no matter what the situation is one of the most important things. You pulled it off with romance. I almost never see that. Congratulations.

I think one of the reasons I love how you pulled this off so much is because it reads almost exactly like I'd imagine myself writing romance if I ever got around to writing a shipping fic. One of the reasons I've avoided writing shipping is because I thought this way of writing it wouldn't work out well, or seem like a bit of a cop-out or anti-climatic ("You love me and want to be my boy/girlfriend? Eh, sure, why not?") but this fic shows that it can work well, if you put some thought into it. It's kind of inspiring for me; maybe I should give writing a shipping fic another try sometime...

...I think I'm nearly on the verge of changing subjects and ranting. I should probably stop before I decide to start listing my detailed observations about everything that annoys me about fan fiction and shipping, because this fic has nothing to do with that list—it's swiftly avoided each and every one of the annoyances I can think of. Seriously, awesome job here. :)

(Time for me to start gearing up to read Silent Ponyville 2. =D)
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Its hard ot find the right words to reply to this simply because its such an awesome post! Thanks for enjoying my story and understanding what I was going for. If I do shipping it has to be about why the characters would end up together at all after all. Just simply 'being in love' won't cut it for me X3

Thanks for being a fan and giving an awesome post! I hope you enjoy/enjoyed the rest of my stories just as much ;3
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TanithLipsky Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011
nice
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BentlyHD Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2011
Sidetracked again but its still Halloween loved the epilogue! I think I mentioned this before but shipping stories aren't normally my thing so its nice to see one that I can really enjoy.

I have noticed that yeah my posts aren't as good for them either since this is one of the few I have read maybe ill check out some more but anyways after that good laugh and really good dawww (I think that's right) its time for the main event!
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TeenBulma Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think I have a new ship

This was absolutely adorable and funny and I loved it
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Huzzah! More minions to my bandwagon! X3
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HareTrinity Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
"Hey! I can be fancy when I need to, I just don't feel like it." Rainbow Dash huffed.

= Yes
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dragonfire9267 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
It... it took a while, but i finally figured out that Too Shy for a Rainbow comes before The Rainbow's Surprise...
Lightbulb moment...
Love both of 'em, though! ^_^
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, well I'm glad you're a fan! Its because of people like you that I love to update X3
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Xearo120 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
Well after reading the entire thing id have to say this is one of the more unique ones that ive read most of the shipping ones ive seen are strait to the hot action of them spontaneously kissing and flying into a wild stage of lust, eventhough thoes arent half bad as well, but this one was very gradual and it gave a load of insight to the past relating to the present which i LOVED so kudos good sir! =D
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! It builds up even more in the Grimdark/Crossover fic Silent Ponyville 2, and is going to come to a head in The Rainbow's Surprise! So if you'd like to read more of it look those fics up.

Glad to have caught your fancy and met your approval. I love pleasing my fans X3
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Xearo120 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011
aw yes u have definetly succeded in that department following and hoping to see more awsome things to come! =D
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maxmice Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011
The whole story made me smile.
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad it did X3
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Solaris90 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This was so incredibly sweet and cute. I started reading it right after Silent Ponyville, so I guess now it's time to start on Silent Ponyville 2!
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you =3

And hopefully Silent Ponyville 2 will be made better for it, as that's how it was intended X3
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pepemacho Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this was a great story, I loved it all the way. I would like to read some more about these two in the future.
I also loved Silent Ponyville, you are a great writter, although you sometime make grammatical or syntaxis mistakes, are you spanish?
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I is not XD

Silent Ponyville 1 was one of the first serious attempts at writing I'd done in a long time. since then I've been actively writting and catching a lot more of my errors and am a lot better at it. I also have more editors now (probably still need to pick one more who can nit-pick out everything wrong) and my work has improved a lot since then.

I'm planning to go back and remaster Silent Ponyville 1. Keep the story exactly the same, just take out the spelling errors, grammatical errors, repetition that grated to read and probably add in some details too ^_^
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NotAGoodUsername360 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011
"Silent Ponyville 1 was one of the first serious attempts at writing I'd done in a long time. since then I've been actively writting and catching a lot more of my errors and am a lot better at it."

Apparently not... XD
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
DA doesn't count. I don't really double-check my errors on here before posting like I do with my stories XD
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Mincho94 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011
... Ok well i'm usually against the idea of any of the ponies being les but i just couldn't help but completely love this story and actually start... supporting the idea o_o You skilled mind mixer, you...
Why is a love story between ponies so Daw'able!
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I always give my shipping purpose. I don't see any of them as lesbians either, which is a key plot point going into Silent Ponyville 2 as well.

And if you remember, Dash hasn't thought about anyone in a sexual manner, meaning she's more asexual than either or. This is her experiment to see if she likes it, whether she cares more about love or physical attraction X3
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Mincho94 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011
Well, in SP2 she seems to like it a lot =P
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Gratlofatic Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
D'AAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWEEEEEE.
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'll take that as you liked it then :D
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Gratlofatic Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yews :) I'm not going to write a huge critique for it but I will have my opinion in ^^
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jake-heritagu Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I wasn't expecting as big a one as Silent Ponyville, there's not AS MUCH to this story as there was to that one. Though I will expect as big a one for Silent Ponyville 2 XD
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Gratlofatic Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
If I get around to reading Silent Ponyville 2 (Which I probably will) :D

I started TSfaR at 4 in the morning and finished at around 6. It was a great read and I love the ending :) I'll start my critique soon
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Ace2401 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011
"And hopefully give you some insight as to how this relationship will play out, at least for now~"

*Still has Ch6 of SP2 on the mind*

YOU EVIL FIEND!!!!

Haha, you know I love your stories right? I've totally got to be your biggest fan, even if you have crossed the Moral Event Horizon XD
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